Dasein Posted December 9, 2019 Share Posted December 9, 2019 I'm waiting on a new Bridge plate for my Floyd . The Hamer branded Shaller finally gave up the ghost on me - I'd tapped and drilled and installed helicoils, and now they are popping out and stripping, so a new plate arrives here tomorrow from Shaller in Germany. But that gave me some time to finish the lyrics on this song - lead guitar will come when the Hamer is ready to go! Drums are still my weakness - but this one has a bit of a groove to it. I hope you enjoy. The guitar is my Hamer in dropped D (2 tracks) with an acoustic track blended with the clean guitar track as well. I was cutting leads when the bridge died.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steve Haynie Posted December 9, 2019 Share Posted December 9, 2019 I listened all the way through. The song never really jumps out until that last part at the end. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dasein Posted December 9, 2019 Author Share Posted December 9, 2019 45 minutes ago, Steve Haynie said: I listened all the way through. The song never really jumps out until that last part at the end. good to know... I'm hoping some better drums and leads will fix that but I did try a structural thing with this one where I made the bridge more exciting than the chorus - might have left the song too flat otherwise. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zenmindbeginner Posted December 9, 2019 Share Posted December 9, 2019 Plenty of songs have a peak at the bridge... no probs with that idea at all. I really dig the tune. I like the “feel” and vibe which is maybe the most important aspect of a song IMHO. Good vocals and you’re really getting the double track thing down... there are so many ways to accomplish this but how in particular did you get that effect? I think it’s a quality song. For some odd reason I think it would make a great “Synthwave” song. Right now, it’s a sort of laid back - California - late 70s soft rock arrangement... sort of the target Sugar Ray was reaching for in the mid-ish ‘90s with Someday & Every Morning. Those songs punctuated their vibe with breaks containing small and simple ornamental licks. You might want to figure out how to periodically get people’s attention with little breaks or whatnot but in the end it’s a good song & you should be proud of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Dave Posted December 10, 2019 Share Posted December 10, 2019 I can't see anything for some reason I use the 'https everywhere' add-on for Firefox, would that be anything to do with it perhaps? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mathman Posted December 10, 2019 Share Posted December 10, 2019 it was there earlier but now I don't see it anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dasein Posted January 10, 2020 Author Share Posted January 10, 2020 Thanks again guys. Took some of your advice and added a few more melodic elements - I may add a wee bit more. As a note - aside from the acoustic guitar here (which is subtle) it's all my Hamer Cali. I really appreciate the feedback and listens. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommy p Posted January 10, 2020 Share Posted January 10, 2020 The descending chords in the verses over the bass pedaling A reminded me of Secrets by Van Halen, but that's in D. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dasein Posted January 11, 2020 Author Share Posted January 11, 2020 Thanks Tommy - I love that song.... Ed's got such swing in that....almost a shuffle feel. Secrets has great guitar in it too. It's one of those songs I wish I had a double neck for! R. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jakeboy Posted January 11, 2020 Share Posted January 11, 2020 @Dasein, listen to ZMB. I agree it is a wonderful song That really has that 70s AM vibe that I love so much. But it needs those little ornamental breaks Zen spoke of to become GREAT. It really does have that laid back SoCal 70s thing but it needs those little baby hooks that reels us in all the way. Overall a great tune. And I get it...drums are hard. Your production is clean. My recordings are so dirty and saturated..,this makes me feel like I need a nice clean recording like this. Good job, brother. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dasein Posted January 11, 2020 Author Share Posted January 11, 2020 39 minutes ago, Jakeboy said: @Dasein, listen to ZMB. I agree it is a wonderful song That really has that 70s AM vibe that I love so much. But it needs those little ornamental breaks Zen spoke of to become GREAT. It really does have that laid back SoCal 70s thing but it needs those little baby hooks that reels us in all the way. Overall a great tune. And I get it...drums are hard. Your production is clean. My recordings are so dirty and saturated..,this makes me feel like I need a nice clean recording like this. Good job, brother. Thanks Jake -- more hooks to come... I gotta sit with this for a bit while I let them all come to me! I like what I added so far but I need more for sure.... just gotta envision them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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